Rain in the Window
jellie_rayneluv (jellie_rayneluv) wrote on August 24th, 2009 at 04:40 pm
Kudos!!! Your characterizations of all the crew were splendid. For this being your first Firefly/Rayne fic, that was pretty amazing.

The interaction between River and Jayne at the Fair was so sweet. Favorite lines:

Jayne growled in frustration, before crumpling himself, “Look. I ain’t fit to be with a girl like you. Anyone with a lick of sense will tell you that.”

“I don’t care about sense. I care about this,” She put her hand over his heart, gazing down at her action, before glancing back up.

He darted his eyes away. “Aw River,” He took a deep breath. “I’d ignore anythin’ goin’ on in there. It ain’t worth it. Trust me.”

Really loved it...hope you continue with River's journey to claim her prize.
 
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